This writing is full of the variety and smell of an Austalian city night (Melbourne I'm guessing?) I love the image of the couple dancing on and past all the humanity in its great diversity and chaos. It's lot down by the read being a bit too fast and a bit hard to hear though. The mix could have the voice a bit more present. Keep writing.
I'd like to hear a version of this without the background music, I don't think it adds anything significant to the work and sometimes makes it a bit hard to hear the words which are great!
Thanks for sharing it on Pool Ciaran & Scott
John Jacobs
Pool >> Audience experience & Community contact
This is such a tender poem... and I really like the delivery - your voice is natural and rhythmic but not sing song ...
The music gives that sense of how round and round it goes - and not every drunk is mad and violent, some are mad and in love, and there but for the grace of ? go we.
Thanks Ciaran and Scott... it's quite gorgeous!
Gretchen
(City Nights producer)
PS - what about posting the text with the audio, or would that defeat the point? I'll definitely revisit to listen again anyway...
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07.05.09 — Claudia Taranto
This writing is full of the variety and smell of an Austalian city night (Melbourne I'm guessing?) I love the image of the couple dancing on and past all the humanity in its great diversity and chaos. It's lot down by the read being a bit too fast and a bit hard to hear though. The mix could have the voice a bit more present. Keep writing.
06.05.09 — John Jacobs
I'd like to hear a version of this without the background music, I don't think it adds anything significant to the work and sometimes makes it a bit hard to hear the words which are great!
Thanks for sharing it on Pool Ciaran & Scott
John Jacobs
Pool >> Audience experience & Community contact
06.05.09 — ciaran and scott
Thanks very much for the positive feed back Gretchen.
Ciaran.
06.05.09 — Gretchen Miller
This is such a tender poem... and I really like the delivery - your voice is natural and rhythmic but not sing song ...
The music gives that sense of how round and round it goes - and not every drunk is mad and violent, some are mad and in love, and there but for the grace of ? go we.
Thanks Ciaran and Scott... it's quite gorgeous!
Gretchen
(City Nights producer)
PS - what about posting the text with the audio, or would that defeat the point? I'll definitely revisit to listen again anyway...